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December 14th, 2000, 09:53 AM
#1
Inactive Member
So sorry you don't like the way I look.
I never said my face was nice
Never said my waist was small.
So it's not my fault you presumed they were.
I'm not the perfection you expected me to be
But I won't apologize for myself
Because I am what I am.
Deal with it.
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December 15th, 2000, 10:49 AM
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December 15th, 2000, 02:23 PM
#3
Inactive Member
I like everything except the last line. Just strikes me as bitter overkill for some reason. The first part of the poem does just fine on its own.
take care
---jones
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December 24th, 2000, 08:00 AM
#4
Inactive Member
I really didn't think that the poem was trying to make looks out to be first-ondary. I just thought it was straight-forward and saying shut-up.
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I love you, too, darlings.
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December 24th, 2000, 05:01 PM
#5
Inactive Member
Jeze... sweetie, you look great, and NEVER let anyone else tell you different 
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~Stoner~
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February 23rd, 2001, 11:13 AM
#6
Inactive Member
wow.
it always sucks when two months later you realize that the person you wanted to see something the most did see it.
funny how shit can change in two months, eh?
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